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Q: In your opinion, what happens when people make poor decisions in life?
A: When people make poor decisions in life, they can just regret, or lose something or someone.
People always make mistakes, so they can make small poor decisions, and that can cause them to regret about what happened.
But if a person makes a poor decision in an important thing, a big lose can come after him or her.

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Hi, Paul!

Thank you for answering your homework. I hope the corrections below will help you improve in making sentences in the future.

~T. Divina^^

1. When people make poor decisions in life, they can just regret, or lose something or someone.
>>When people make poor decisions in life, they either regret or lose something or someone.

2. People always make mistakes, so they can make small poor decisions, and that can cause them to regret about what happened.
>>When people make mistakes, it causes them to regret the things that happen because of their poor decisions.

3. But if a person makes a poor decision in an important thing, a big lose can come after him or her.
>>If a person makes a poor decision over an important thing, he/she can lose something big.
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