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When I traveled alone. I did it for 1day.
Biggest challenge is sleeping alone.
Staying at a cafe and eating alone is okay.
But I couldn¡¯t sleep alone at the hotel.
Every time when I traveled alone
my husband didn¡¯t know it.
If I traveled alone It would be caused by my husband.
So bigges challenge is how do I can solve my problem.

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Ms. Sunny!
You are an amazing woman. Doing something alone and not putting yourself in danger is "power". I understand there are times that we are offended by the people close to us, but we find an outlet to release our stress and feelings.
Your way of getting out of a situation is a good one, but that would be expensive for me :) I guess in my case, I would just hike the mountain if I am terribly upset.
Have a good day always!
Aki~

When I traveled alone. I did it for one day.
>>>  CORRECT!
OR >> I usually do an all-day trip by myself.

Biggest challenge is sleeping alone.
>>> The biggest challenge is sleeping alone.

Staying at a cafe and eating alone is okay.
>>>  CORRECT!

But I couldn¡¯t sleep alone at the hotel.
>>>  CORRECT!

Every time when I traveled alone my husband didn¡¯t know it.
>>>  CORRECT!

If I traveled alone It would be caused by my husband.
>>>  CORRECT!

So bigges challenge is how do I can solve my problem.
>> So the biggest challenge is how can I solve my problem.
>> So the biggest challenge is how do I solve my problem.

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