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Hey, T. Beth.
How was your day?
Was there a something special?
I had a hectic day in the clinic.
Actually, there was not too much patients/clients, however, there were some problems.
The worst thing was a water leakage on the top.
It happened 4 times these days.
Since these accidents happened by an interior company who construct all interior of 5th floor, the company boss apologized for it many times.
He promised to correct all defects from these accident before.
However, I couldn't stand this recurrent accident today.
Two people who are in charge of water pipe, the interior boss, 5th floor owner who is a dentist and somewhat close to me, and 4th floor owner(me) discussed about this accident.
They explaned to me about the cause and solvation, but I couldn't trust them anymore.
Thus, I called another water pipe veteran, and we dicieded to check this problem tomorrow morning together.
About homework, a new technology can change society better and worse according to many things.
See you.

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Thank you for This Dr. Kim. My day was pretty normal. I hit the gym today to do some workout with a friend.
I understand why you are frustrated about that incident in your clinic. It happened many times so it definitely is infuriating. Hope you get to solve that tomorrow. Good luck!

Hey, T. Beth.
>>> correct
How was your day?
>>> correct
Was there a something special?
>>> Was there something special?
I had a hectic day in the clinic.
>>>  correct
Actually, there was not too much patients/clients, however, there were some problems.
>>> Actually, there weren't a lot of patients/clients. However, there were some problems. 
The worst thing was a water leakage on the top.
>>> correct
It happened 4 times these days.
>>> correct
Since these accidents happened by an interior company who construct all interior of 5th floor, the company boss apologized for it many times.
>>> Since these accidents happened due to an interior company who has been doing construction on all interior of the 5th floor, the company boss apologized for it many times.
He promised to correct all defects from these accident before.
>>> correct
However, I couldn't stand this recurrent accident today.
>>> correct
Two people who are in charge of water pipe, the interior boss, 5th floor owner who is a dentist and somewhat close to me, and 4th floor owner(me) discussed about this accident.
>>> correct
They explaned to me about the cause and solvation, but I couldn't trust them anymore.
>>> They explained to me about the cause and solution, but I couldn't trust them anymore.
Thus, I called another water pipe veteran, and we dicided to check this problem tomorrow morning together.
>>> correct
About homework, a new technology can change society better and worse according to many things.
>>> Regarding the homework, a new technology can change the society better and worse depending on many things.
See you.
>>> correct
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