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The mistake of last relationship.

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I think a mistake of my last relationship was starting relationship with a wrong person. I had not to be with her. I should notice or guess when she betrayed her ex boyfriend. It is easy to know about her personality. It was my fault. I will never do same mistakes.

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Hello there, Thomas!

As evident in class, you can only do and go better from now on. Sometimes, we have to commit mistakes to live and learn and it is always for the best. I am glad that you have moved on so drastically in very good ways. 

I am very excited for you to your next journey towards love.

Then,  decipher the difference in the use of 'a' and 'the' below. You just need a few grammar refinements and you will be perfect in your writing. Excellent job!

Have a great day!

-T. Donna~

I think a mistake of my last relationship was starting relationship with a wrong person. 
>> I think a mistake of my last relationship was starting it with the wrong person. 

I had not to be with her. 
>> Correct!
Or: I should be with her.

I should notice or guess when she betrayed her ex boyfriend. 
>> Correct!

It is easy to know about her personality. It was my fault. 
>> Correct!

I will never do same mistakes.
>> I will never do the same mistakes.
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