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What are the advantages of living in an apartment?

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I think that there many advantages when living in an apartment.
First of all I can live safe life because there are a security guard in there.
and there many kinds of stores where near my apartment complex flacks.
so I can buy when I need something. kind of convenience store, post office, Fire station, big market and there are many different restaurants.
above all thins there No damage when lots of rained and windy.

so I prefer to live in a apartment

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You are right, Jullia! I truly agree that living in an apartment has many benefits, so stay safe!-Faith-
I think that there many advantages when living in an apartment.
>> I think that there are many advantages when living in an apartment.
First of all I can live safe life because there are a security guard in there.
>> First, I can live safe because there are security guards there.
and there many kinds of stores where near my apartment complex flacks.
>> Also, there are many kinds of stores near my apartment complex.
so I can buy when I need something. kind of convenience store, 
>> Therefore, I can buy when I need something at a convenience store. 
post office, Fire station, big market and there are many different restaurants.
>> Also, I can go to the post office, fire station, big market, and many different restaurants.
above all thins there No damage when lots of rained and windy.

>> Above all things, there are no damages when there is heavy rain and strong wind.
so I prefer to live in a apartment
>> Thus, I prefer to live in an apartment.
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