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ESSAY: Some people think that a person improves intellectual skills better when doing group activities. To what extent do you agree? Use specific details and examples to explain your view.

I think this opinion is collect. humans are smarter than who is in alone.
Because they talk about all things each other.
it that we call 'brainstorming' our mind to be better.
But too many minds can be fail.
The most important thing in group activities is changing each thinking.

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Thanks again Lee! I see that you are always eager to improve your English skills!^^ I appreciate your effort~!^^ See you!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I think this opinion is collect. 
>>> I think this statement is correct. 
OR>>> I agree with the statement.
humans are smarter than who is in alone.
>>> People in groups are smarter than those who prefer to stay alone. 
Because they talk about all things each other.
>>> Because they can talk about a lot of things with each other. 
it that we call 'brainstorming' our mind to be better.
>>> We call it 'brainstorming' for our mind to be better.
But too many minds can be fail.
>>> But too many minds can be a failure.
>>> But too many ideas can fail.
The most important thing in group activities is changing each thinking.
>>> The most important thing in group activities is exchanging thoughts or ideas.
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