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What is the biggest change you\'d like to make to your life?

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2023-08-24 2101

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I want to change about dealing of my life.
While i live a my life, sometimes I don¡¯t feel other emotion.
Just i live life without feeling. Because i planned my future. for achieving the goal, just i live life.
Maybe if i can change something, i will start to reset my mindset.

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Hello Su,

Thank you for doing your homework. You did a good job sharing your feelings about how you handle life. It's okay to want to make changes. Sometimes, we go through life without feeling much, especially when we're focused on our plans and goals. But guess what? Wanting to change is a positive thing. It's like giving your thoughts a fresh start. Keep up the good work, and if you want to talk more, I'm here to listen.

~Teacher Cathy

 

I want to change about dealing of my life.

>>I want to change the way I deal with my life
While i live a my life, sometimes I don¡¯t feel other emotion.

>>While I live my life, sometimes I don¡¯t experience certain emotions.
Just i live life without feeling. Because i planned my future.

>>I just live life without really feeling it, as I have planned my future.

for achieving the goal, just i live life.

>>I am solely focused on achieving my goals.
Maybe if i can change something, i will start to reset my mindset.

>> Perhaps if I can make some changes, I will be able to reset my mindset.

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