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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Who plays video games more, adults or children? Why?

In my opinion, adults play more video games using a game consoles more than children.
I think the reason is the memories.
Maybe we have these kinds of childhood memories.
When we was young, memories of not having what we wanted things.
Or the memories of having again the games or toys we enjoyed as a child.
It's called "Kidult" in these day's word.
Kidult is become a hobby these day's.
So, many adults play video games using a game consoles.
On the other hand, I think children also play games using a smartphone.
In other countries of case, I don't know well.
But In Korea, parents don't like children playing computer games at home.
So, children then to play games using a smartphones instead of game consoles and computer.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Who plays video games more, adults or children? Why?


In my opinion, adults play more video games using a game consoles more than children.
>> In my opinion, adults play more video games using game consoles more than children.
I think the reason is the memories.
>> CORRECT!
Maybe we have these kinds of childhood memories.
>> CORRECT!
When we was young, memories of not having what we wanted things.
>> When we were young, we have memories of not having the things we wanted.
Or the memories of having again the games or toys we enjoyed as a child.
>> Or we may also have the memories of having the games or toys we enjoyed as a child.
It's called "Kidult" in these day's word.
>> CORRECT!
Kidult is become a hobby these day's.
>> Kidult has become a hobby these days.
So, many adults play video games using a game consoles.
>> So, many adults play video games using game consoles
On the other hand, I think children also play games using a smartphone.
>> CORRECT!
In other countries of case, I don't know well.
>> In other countries' case, I don't know it well.
But In Korea, parents don't like children playing computer games at home.
>> CORRECT!
So, children then to play games using a smartphones instead of game consoles and computer.
>> So, children tend to play games using smartphones instead of game consoles and computer.
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