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I do not really know what I can improve myself when I go to Japan. But I guess I will be probably able to get some good memories and experience in Japan with my old friend who met 10years ago in Philippine and never see again. I will realize that my life is still good and have a good journey.

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Good evening, Thomas!

You are right. You can only realize what thing or lesson you have learned when you have been there and experienced being with RV. Maybe, the better question is what expectations you have or plans in visiting Japan.

I am sure that you will have a blast in Japan. Have a fantastic time!

Thank you for your consistency in improving your grammar. Great job!

See you soon.

-T. Donna~

I do not really know what I can improve myself when I go to Japan. 
>> Correct!

But I guess I will be probably able to get some good memories and experience in Japan with my old friend who met 10years ago in Philippine and never see again. 
>>  But I guess I will probably be able to get some good memories and experience in Japan with my old friend who I met 10 years ago in Philippines and never saw again. Very good sentence!

I will realize that my life is still good and have a good journey.
>> Correct!
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