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I have a good memory about holidays with my friends. I went on a trip by train with my best friends who were high school mates. The train ticket which used free during a week was special prices for students. So we went around Korea during the week by train. We slept Korean style spa which called gim-gil-bang. We had to save money because we were students so we didn't have much money. That time was so funny and memorable to me.

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Hello again, Thomas!

The best memories are sometimes those that we spend with our friends. Mostly, they are our high school pals. Those times, we did not really have enough money but we never run short of fun.

These memories will last a lifetime. Today, we can still create good ones. It may not be easy but we need to try.

You are a very good story-teller. Your sentences are clear and meaningful. Please study the grammar points I made.

Great job! See you.

-T. Donna~

I have a good memory about holidays with my friends. 
>> Correct!

I went on a trip by train with my best friends who were high school mates. 
>>   I went on a trip by train with my best friends who were my high school mates. 

The train ticket which used free during a week was special prices for students. 
>> The train ticket which we used for free during a week were special prices for students. 

So we went around Korea during the week by train. 
>> Correct!

We slept Korean style spa which called gim-gil-bang. 
>> We slept in a  Korean style spa which is called gim-gil-bang. 

We had to save money because we were students so we didn't have much money. 
>> Correct!

That time was so funny and memorable to me.
>> Correct!
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