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I think it's important to eat complete meals everyday.
Most of the people tend to skip breakfast, because they consider sleeping is more important than eating breakfast.
In my case, I have adjusted eating breakfast since I was a child.
So, if I skip the meal, I feel hungry, and cannot focus on my work.
I think eating proper meals at time is good to get energy for doing something.
It is scientifically proved.
Brain use glucose as energy source, so, providing proper glucose from meals is important to make brain working actively.

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Hello, Stella! Isn't it a beautiful day today? It's even more beautiful when I saw how hard you worked in answering the homework that I give you. I always feel grateful about your effort in sharing your ideas by answering the homework being given to you. With the hardwork you are showing, I will make sure that all your effort in class will be reflected with your improvement and further development of your skills. Until then, I'll just see you in class.  ~ T. Marie ^^ 
I think it's important to eat complete meals everyday.
>> CORRECT SENTENCE
Most of the people tend to skip breakfast, because they consider sleeping is more important than eating breakfast.
>> Most people tend to skip breakfast because they consider sleeping as more important than eating breakfast. 
In my case, I have adjusted eating breakfast since I was a child.
>> CORRECT SENTENCE
So, if I skip the meal, I feel hungry, and cannot focus on my work.
>> So, If I skip meal, I feel hungry and I cannot focus on my work. 
I think eating proper meals at time is good to get energy for doing something.
>> CORRECT SENTENCE
It is scientifically proved.
>> It is scientifically proven. 
Brain use glucose as energy source, so, providing proper glucose from meals is important to make brain working actively.
>> Brain uses glucose as energy source, so providing proper glucose from meals is important to make our brain work actively. 
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