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HOMEWORK for 09/08
Write 5-8 sentences
TOPIC: What do you think is the most effective way to stop or break a vice? Why do you think so?

I think if someone want to change himself from vice He have to realize himself because evene if another people advice to him he never change it if he doesnt realize

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Good morning, Min Seog. I am always grateful for your effort in answering the questions being given to you in your homework. We will keep on doing activities that will help you to enhance your abilities even more. See you in class! ~ T. Marie ^^ 
I think if someone want to change himself from vice He have to realize himself because evene if another people advice to him he never change it if he doesnt realize
>> I think if someone wants to change themselves from their vice, they have to realize it by themselves.
>> Even if other people give them advice, they will never change unless they realize it. 
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