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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Are there any health benefits to drinking coffee?

I think, each kinds of coffee has different health benefits.
In the case of instant coffee, first of all it's delicious.
Because it's include such as sugar, syrup, and cream are add for taste.
So, it's not good for health benefits.
But, I want often this kind of coffee because of its sweet.
And in my opinion, americano or espresso are many people drinking this kinds of coffee for health.
Because, many people believe that this kinds of coffees healthy benefits.
This kinds of coffee has low calories and helps own focus more on exercise or studying.
So, many people want it for healthy benefits.
Any way, I think the most important thing is we don't overeating.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Are there any health benefits to drinking coffee?


I think, each kinds of coffee has different health benefits.
>> I think, each kind of coffee has different health benefits.
In the case of instant coffee, first of all it's delicious.
>> CORRECT!
Because it's include such as sugar, syrup, and cream are add for taste.
>> That's because it includes sugar, syrup, and cream that add taste to it.
So, it's not good for health benefits.
>> So, it's not good for our health.
OR >> So, it's not beneficial for our health.
But, I want often this kind of coffee because of its sweet.
>> But, I want this kind of coffee often because it's sweet.
And in my opinion, americano or espresso are many people drinking this kinds of coffee for health.
>> And in my opinion, Americano is what many people drink for health purposes.
Because, many people believe that this kinds of coffees healthy benefits.
>> It's because many people believe that this kind of coffee has healthy benefits.
This kinds of coffee has low calories and helps own focus more on exercise or studying.
>> This kind of coffee has low calories and it helps you focus more on exercising or studying.
So, many people want it for healthy benefits.
>> So, many people want it for its health benefits.
Any way, I think the most important thing is we don't overeating.
>> Anyway, I think the most important thing is that we don't overeat.

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