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Why we celebrate the holidays

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In my opinion, there are some reasons of celebration our holidays. We lived in agrarian society. So we celebrated our harvest not only sharing food with family who worked together during the year but also wishing for a good harvest. That custom continues lately.

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Hello, Thomas!

Since this had been customary as well as a part of your lives, every year, missing such occasions may feel incomplete for some. As for some women, this can be taxing as they need to prepare several food on the table or arrange things for the celebration.

Nevertheless, our lives will never be complete since we have to attend to these traditions every now and then.

Thank you for your very good sentences! The third sentence is a masterpiece. Well done!

See you next week!

-T. Donna~

In my opinion, there are some reasons of celebration our holidays. 
>> In my opinion, there are some reasons of celebrating our holidays. 

We lived in agrarian society. 
>> We live in an agrarian society. 

So we celebrated our harvest not only sharing food with family who worked together during the year but also wishing for a good harvest. 
>> Correct! Very good sentence!

That custom continues lately.
>> Correct!
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