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My criminal experience.

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2023-09-14 2596

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I remember that I catched the criminal happened. When I worked for Korean National Park Service I was in charge of prevent illegal in the park. I was a special judicial police at the park. I found out illegal at the park that someone ran the hotel illegally, there are not allowed running the hotel. So I prosecuted him for a crime. So I presented as a witness at the court. Finally he lose the judgment and got punishment.

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Hi there, Thomas!

How was your meeting today? As you told me, you will be preoccupied this Friday and the weekend. 

I never thought that your work also needed some security and you even dealt previously with the incident that you mentioned below. You were like a park ranger! I feel sorry for the offender but you have a job to do and eventually, he suffered the consequence of his offense. You did a great job in being a ranger and the witness at the same time.

Meanwhile, your sentences had very good varieties. Moreover, your story was clear and concise. Pay attention to my suggestions in grammar for the next homework to be even better.

Have a great day! See you.

-T. Donna~

I remember that I catched the criminal happened. 
>> I remember that I caught a crime when happened. 

When I worked for Korean National Park Service I was in charge of prevent illegal in the park. I was a special judicial police at the park. 
>>  When I worked for the Korean National Park Service, I was in charge of preventing illegal activities in the park. I was a special judicial police at the park. 

I found out illegal at the park that someone ran the hotel illegally, there are not allowed running the hotel. 
>> I found out an illegal activity in the park where someone ran the hotel illegally, where it is not allowed to run around the hotel. 

So I prosecuted him for a crime. 
>> Correct!

So I presented as a witness at the court. 
>> Correct!

Finally he lose the judgment and got punishment.
>> Finally, he lost the judgment and got a punishment.
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