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First of all, it's not our country.
I think there are things that each country teaches well depending on the background.
Our country has the highest suicide rate in the world.
Of course, there will be good things about our country.
However, in Korea, schools are moving in line with the pre-learning taught at academies.
In some schools, teachers say that they have learned everything at the academy and pass it without teaching.
I think education in Korea is the worst because the institution that can receive education does not function properly.

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Hello Da Hye,

I appreciate your insights on education. Recognizing both the strengths and weaknesses in our educational system is crucial for improvement. Keep practicing your English, and your language skills will continue to improve!

~Teacher Cathy

 

First of all, it's not our country.

>>CORRECT

OR>>Above all, it's not our country.

I think there are things that each country teaches well depending on the background.

>>I believe that each country excels in teaching based on its unique background.

Our country has the highest suicide rate in the world.

>>CORRECT

OR>>Our nation faces a significant challenge with a high rate of suicide.

Of course, there will be good things about our country.

>>Naturally, there are positive aspects to our country.

However, in Korea, schools are moving in line with the pre-learning taught at academies.

>>However, in South Korea, schools often align their teaching with what students have already learned at private academies.

In some schools, teachers say that they have learned everything at the academy and pass it without teaching.

>>In some schools, teachers say that they have learned everything at the academy and passed it without teaching.

I think education in Korea is the worst because the institution that can receive education does not function properly.

>>In my view, the quality of education in Korea suffers because educational institutions don't always operate as effectively as they should.

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