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If I chose my university and major I would choose architecture from Honglk University. There is very famous in art in Korea. So Architecture is also high level. I wanted to be an architect when in high school.

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Good morning, Thomas!

Thank you so much for sending this homework. It's been a while.

Choosing a university level is tricky when we are young because are still unsure of what we really want to become as young adults. Nevertheless, as we age, we realize what we really want to do and where our hearts are truly happy. Right now, it may seem that our choices were not our original plan however, we still learn some important things to grow.

So, if there is still time, chase your dreams!

Read my grammar suggestions and analyze the structures. Great job! See you soon.

-T. Donna~

If I chose my university and major I would choose architecture from Honglk University. 
>> Correct!
Or: If I chose my university and major I would choose architecture from Hongik University. 

There is very famous in art in Korea. 
>> There is a very famous art in Korea.

So Architecture is also high level. 
>> So Architecture is also in a high level. 

I wanted to be an architect when in high school.
>> I wanted to be an architect when in was in high school.
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