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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Why do some people think that holidays are a bit stressful? What are the possible reasons?

The reason why we wait for holidays is the rest.
But, some holidays are rather stressful.
One of them is when we meet families get together.
Sometimes I watched TV show about other families stories.
I think there are many rude people in the world.
According to the TV show, the are ask the sensitive questions to other family member.
And even them, they are did steal from their visit homes.
So, some people don't want meet their family members.
Because they don't want get stressed.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Why do some people think that holidays are a bit stressful? What are the possible reasons?


The reason why we wait for holidays is the rest.
>> The reason why we wait for holidays is because we want to have our rest time.
But, some holidays are rather stressful.
>> CORRECT!
One of them is when we meet families get together.
>> One of them is when we meet families and have a get-together.
OR >> One of them is when we  have a family get-together.
Sometimes I watched TV show about other families stories.
>> Sometimes I watch TV shows about other families' stories.
I think there are many rude people in the world.
>> CORRECT!
According to the TV show, the are ask the sensitive questions to other family member.
>> According to the TV show, the ask sensitive questions to other family members.
And even them, they are did steal from their visit homes.
>> And even them, they did steal something from the homes they visit.
So, some people don't want meet their family members.
>> So, some people don't want to meet their family members.
Because they don't want get stressed.
>> It's because they don't want to get stressed.
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