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We always make a future plan even if ensure what will happen. Because we don't know the future. If we knew the future we wouldn't need to make a plan. The plan includes our goals, dreams and hope. We can make and decide our future with the plan.

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Hi there, Thomas! How was your trip?

No one has truly seen the future. Thus, creating plans and goals serve as a map or a compass to guide us towards the path of our dreams. Somehow, we need to be flexible with our steps in achieving our aspirations but we have to stick to our dreams so we can measure our actions and eventually reach success.

I wish you all the best to your future plans.

Below, the grammar suggestions have been made to your sentences. Avoid being redundant in your ideas. You can read through the rest of the comments. Well done!

I will see you soon.

-T. Donna~

We always make a future plan even if ensure what will happen. 
>> We always make a future plan even if  we are unsure what will happen. 

Because we don't know the future. If we knew the future we wouldn't need to make a plan.
>>   If we knew the future we wouldn't need to make a plan.

The plan includes our goals, dreams and hope. 
>> Correct!

We can make and decide our future with the plan.
>> Correct!
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