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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Why is dental care important?

Dental care is important because we have to use the teeth almost for the our lives.
We are get permanent teeth after as our childhood teeth fall out.
And, we can't get new teeth anymore.
So, until we become an old age, we have to prevent diseases like a cavities.
Unfortunately, if I become an old age, most of my teeth will be fall out. (I'm so sad :( )
So, I want the DNA of a shark's teeth.
I heard an interesting story.
Because, if fall out their teeth, but shark's continue to grow new teeth.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Why is dental care important?


Dental care is important because we have to use the teeth almost for the our lives.
>> Dental care is important because we have to use our teeth for the rest of our lives.
We are get permanent teeth after as our childhood teeth fall out.
>> We are get our permanent teeth after our milk teeth fall out.
And, we can't get new teeth anymore.
>> CORRECT!
So, until we become an old age, we have to prevent diseases like a cavities.
>> So, until we become old, we have to prevent diseases like cavities.
Unfortunately, if I become an old age, most of my teeth will be fall out. (I'm so sad :( )
>> Unfortunately, if I become old, most of my teeth U (I'm so sad :( )
So, I want the DNA of a shark's teeth.
>> CORRECT!
I heard an interesting story.
>> CORRECT!
Because, if fall out their teeth, but shark's continue to grow new teeth.
>> Because, if their teeth fall out, sharks continue to grow new teeth.

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