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One of the biggist benifits is exemption of conscription in Korean men.

Conscription is the burden on men and their parents.

So there are several corruptions about military serveic specially politians and celebrities.

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One of the biggist benifits is exemption of conscription in Korean men.

>>One of the biggest benefits is the exemption from conscription for Korean men.
Conscription is the burden on men and their parents.

>>Conscription places a burden on men and their parents.
So there are several corruptions about military serveic specially politians and celebrities.

>>As a result, there are several controversies related to military service, especially involving politicians and celebrities.


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