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Homework

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2023-10-20 3293

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I will never tolerate it if my daughters are bullied. When my second daughter was in the second grade of elementary school, she had a hard time because two of her classmates were bullying her. They were among her friends, but they secretly made them fight with each other and kept them from going to class, leading them into bad ways. Her daughter said she felt sorry for her friends because they were children who had no parents or were abused by her parents, so she thought she should stay with them. I also let them know that it is not for . She also made me think and choose whether I wanted to continue hanging out with those kids or not. She consulted with her homeroom teacher and talked to the children's parents, but one of her friends did not reflect at all and harassed not only the teacher and her daughter, but also her classmates, swearing and swearing quite harshly compared to her young age. He was a friend with rough behavior...Continue with Skype...

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Good day! Eliana!
Very imressive! I really appreciate all the effort you put in in your homework. Carry on! I won't be saying a lot since most of your sentences were constructed correctly.
Aki~

I will never tolerate it if my daughters are bullied.
>>> CORRECT!
OR>> I won't tolerate bullying if my daughters are involved.

When my second daughter was in the second grade of elementary school, she had a hard time because two of her classmates were bullying her. 
>>> CORRECT!

They were among her friends, but they secretly made them fight with each other and kept them from going to class, leading them into bad ways. 
>>>  They were among her friends, but they secretly made them fight with each other and kept them from going to class, leading them in bad ways. 

Her daughter said she felt sorry for her friends because they were children who had no parents or were abused by her parents, so she thought she should stay with them. I also let them know that it is not for.
>>> CORRECT!

She also made me think and choose whether I wanted to continue hanging out with those kids or not.
>>> CORRECT!

She consulted with her homeroom teacher and talked to the children's parents, but one of her friends did not reflect at all and harassed not only the teacher and her daughter but also her classmates, swearing and swearing quite harshly compared to her young age. 
>>> CORRECT!

He was a friend with rough behavior.
>>> She was a friend with rough behavior.
>>> She was a friend with rowdy behavior.

FROM SKYPE:

She was a child who made not only her friends but also her homeroom teacher cry. 
>>> CORRECT!

I requested a meeting with the child in the presence of the homeroom teacher and explained the word bullying to the child.
>>> CORRECT!

I told her that I was my daughter's mother and that in order to fulfill my role as a guardian, I had decided to deal with the child who was bullying her and what bullying was.
>>> CORRECT!

He said he wanted us to experience it together and that he would only follow you around during class, during the experience, at lunchtime, and even to the front of the house. 
>>> CORRECT!

Without saying or doing anything else, I said I would follow you around and sit next to you in class, and I even asked the homeroom teacher in front of the child for permission. 
>>> CORRECT!

She noticed that the child noticed her confident and unstoppable expression and posture and became frightened.
>>> CORRECT!

She promised to stay away from her second daughter and did not bother her after that. 
>>> CORRECT!

 I think it was a big incident that happened in my family and at that elementary school at the time.
>>> CORRECT!

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