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After school, convenience store.

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After school, I went to CU convenience store with my friend. I eat small snack, and my friends bought ramen or drinks. One of my firend was making ramen, he was eating Buldak. Buldak ramen is a ramen that needs no soup so aftr he cook noodle, he went to trash the water. After 10second he come back with empty bowl, and he throw that as strong as he could. so we asked him why you don't have your noodle and he said that he throwed noodle together when he trash the wter. He looked so poor

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Good day, Jude! Thank you for sharing your convenience store experience. I agree, I also feel sorry  for your friend about what happened. Isn't buldak spicy for you? We will talk more in class. I will see you then. Keep safe! ~T. Lyn
After school, I went to CU convenience store with my friends. 
>>Correct. or My friend and I went to CU convenience store after school.
I eat small snack, and my friends bought ramen or drinks. 
>>I ate a quick snack and my friends bought ramen or drinks.
One of my firend was making ramen, he was eating Buldak. 
>>One of my friends was making ramen and eating fire chicken
Buldak ramen is a ramen that needs no soup so aftr he cook noodle, he went to trash the water. 
>>Buldak ramen is a type of ramen that does not require soup, just boil the noodles and disregard or drain the water after.
After 10second he come back with empty bowl, and he throw that as strong as he could. 
>>Ten second later, he came back with an empty bowl and threw it as hard as he could.
so we asked him why you don't have your noodle and he said that he throwed noodle together when he trash the wter. 
>>So I asked him why there were no noodles and he said that he threw them together with the water by accident.
He looked so poor
>>He looked so sad and I felt sorry for him.
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