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Nami island is beautiful place that people are good for walk while they are feeling it.
It takes only 1hours to go around it.
I don¡¯t know why the hotel has been built in this small island.
Nami island has to be preserved from artificial building like hotel.

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Great day, Ms. Sunny!
It saddens me to learn that there is already an establishment like this on Nami Island. yes we understand that some people would love to stay and enjoy the place much longer, but the government must consider on its preservation rather than development.
Capitalism is scary.
Aki~

Nami island is beautiful place that people are good for walk while they are feeling it.
>>> Nami Island is a beautiful place where people can experience good walking while they are feeling it.
>>> Nami Island is a beautiful place where people can experience good and enjoyable walking.

It takes only 1 hour to go around it.
>>> CORRECT!

I don¡¯t know why the hotel has been built in this small island.
<<< I don¡¯t know why a hotel has been built on this small island.

Nami island has to be preserved from artificial building like hotel.
>>> Nami Island has to be preserved against artificial buildings like hotels.
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