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Homework - \'The reason that Professional athletes and coaches make different an amount of money\'

작성자: 이*주
2023-10-31 3493

회원님의 영작문

"Wow.. It's so difficult homework.
To be honest, I love watching various soccer games over my phone.
So, I'm really interested in professional athletes and coaches.
Because I can see a lot of news in the sports category on the internet.

If you look at the sports-related news, you can see what the athletes and coaches have different role.
If there is one of the best player in the world of sports, the person can make a lot of money.
But, some player makes even more money than the player.
We call them 'Star player'.

Like the world of athletes, The world of coach is the same.
'Star coach' exist as well definitely.
Some coach makes more money than another coach.
After hearing this story, can you say 'athletes and coach make the same money'?
This story is just my opinion. hehe.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Yes right, both of them earn money, but in different amounts. Hehe, I'm not sure who gets the biggest cut in that instance. But I hope the players get the most out of it because they did most of the work. 
-Chammy

"Wow.. It's so difficult homework.

>>"Wow… It's so difficult homework.

To be honest, I love watching various soccer games over my phone.

>> To be honest, I love watching various soccer games on my phone.

So, I'm really interested in professional athletes and coaches.

>>Correct

Because I can see a lot of news in the sports category on the internet.

>>Correct
If you look at the sports-related news, you can see what the athletes and coaches have different role.

>> If you look at the sports-related news, you can see that the athletes and coaches have different roles.

If there is one of the best player in the world of sports, the person can make a lot of money.

>> If there is one of the best players in the world of sports, the person can make a lot of money.

But, some player makes even more money than the player.

>>Correct

We call them 'Star player'.
>> We call them “Star players”.

Like the world of athletes, The world of coach is the same.

>> Like the world of athletes, the world of coaches is the same.

'Star coach' exist as well definitely.

>>” Star Coach” definitely exists as well.

Some coach makes more money than another coach.

>> Some coach makes more money than other coaches.

After hearing this story, can you say 'athletes and coach make the same money'?

>> After hearing this story, can you say “Athletes and coaches make the same money”?

This story is just my opinion. hehe.

>>Correct


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