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Young students and generations depend on too much digtal devices and culture.

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That is the result of indiscriminate policies and adult's mistakes.

They were not considered the development stage of students reflecting age.

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Thank you for your homework, Lily!

Your hard work will surely pay off!

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Young students and generations depend on too much digtal devices and culture.

>>Correct.
That is very serious phenemenon.

>>That is a very serious phenomenon.
That is the result of indiscriminate policies and adult's mistakes.

>>This is the result of indiscriminate policies and mistakes made by adults. 
They were not considered the development stage of students reflecting age.

>>They did not take into consideration the developmental stage of students that corresponds to their age.


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