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A letter of self introduction

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Actually, I wanna check full contents of self Introduction.
I'm not sure whether the grammar of each sentence is correct.
I want you to correct the grammar If there are wrong or awkward sentences.
There are sentences a lot.. so, I'm sorry to ask you.

What I wanna say is that I appreciate always!...
Thank you for helping me!

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Hello Leo,
I tried to translate the Korean character written in your attached screenshot. It says "If you have career or event experience, please write mainly about the work you performed". So, I guess it is not necessary to write down your realization like what you have written in number 3. Instead, it could be "Responsible for coordinating with prospective organizations by discussing the benefits of our proposal using outstanding communication to establish trust" ... Therefore, I asked you on your next homework to list down first all the tasks you did in your previous job. 
-Chammy
Actually, I wanna check full contents of self Introduction.
>> Actually, I wanna check the full contents of self Introduction.
I'm not sure whether the grammar of each sentence is correct.
>>I'm not sure if the grammar of each sentence is correct.
I want you to correct the grammar If there are wrong or awkward sentences.
>>Correct
There are sentences a lot.. so, I'm sorry to ask you.
>>There are a lot of sentences... So, sorry if I ask you this.
What I wanna say is that I appreciate always!...
>>Correct
Thank you for helping me!
>>Correct
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