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The advantage of exercise is that it keeps your body and mind healthy. When your body becomes healthy through exercise, you look pretty and cool to other people, and you become more confident in your appearance. You also gain mental confidence, so you can do anything or have a conversation. I feel like I can see my confident self. The downside of exercise is that it takes up my time and it involves some pain.

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Eliana,
People have different ideas about "exercise" in the past, exercising was not common because we already had knowledge that if you want to lose weight you have to exercise. Nowadays, exercising is connected with being healthy so you see a lot of people engaging themselves in different activities.
Keep up!
Aki~

The advantage of exercise is that it keeps your body and mind healthy.
>>> CORRECT!

When your body becomes healthy through exercise, you look pretty and cool to other people, and you become more confident in your appearance.
>>> CORRECT!

You also gain mental confidence, so you can do anything or have a conversation.
>>> CORRECT!

I feel like I can see my confident self. The downside of exercise is that it takes up my time and it involves some pain.
>>> CORRECT!
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