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It is sad the word 'elder poverty'.

At the end of life, if we suffer from poverty and disease we are very unhappy.

There has big problem a basic pention in Korea.

All the age of 65 receive the same pention even the rich and wealthy.

I argue that basic pension should be divided according to their property and occupational pensions.

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Ms. Lily!
It is indeed a sad thing that elderly people end up being poor, not only in your country but globally. A lot of people have not prepared for their retirement so there are times when they rely on their children. Another connected issue here is when their children can't support them, where are they going to get their basic needs?
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It is sad the word 'elder poverty'. 
>>> The word elderly poverty sounds sad.

At the end of life, if we suffer from poverty and disease we are very unhappy.
>>> CORRECT!
OR >>> At the end of life, suffering from poverty and disease causes great unhappiness.

There has big problem a basic pention in Korea.
>>> There is a big problem a basic pensions in Korea.

All the age of 65 receive the same pention even the rich and wealthy.
>>> All the age of 65, everyone receives the same pension even the rich and wealthy.

I argue that basic pensions should be divided according to their property and occupational pensions.
>>> CORRECT!
OR >> I propose that basic pensions should be split based on property and occupational pensions.
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