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If you could eat only one food for the rest of your life, what would it be? Why?

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I will choose hamburger. Because it contain various nutrients like Carbohydrate, Protein, and Fat.
And I can choose ingredients what I want to eat.

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Good afternoon, Hyebhin!^^

Burgers contain protein and other elements, however they are not considered a healthy diet option. This is due to their high levels of saturated fat and cholesterol.
However, we can make healthy burgers now by replacing some of the ingredients. For example, instead of a meat patty, we can make veggie patties.

Practice English whenever you can!

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I will choose hamburger. Because it contain various nutrients like Carbohydrate, Protein, and Fat.
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