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When might it be all right to give only a partial truth?

작성자: 김*경
2023-11-27 4023

회원님의 영작문

When we’re summoned as a witness to an accident, we are very careful about what we say, all the more when we’re investigated as a suspect. That’s because we don’t know what it develops after my testimony.

Aside from that, I believe that to watch our mouth is a lot wiser than a big mouth. As the old saying goes, there is no crying over the spilled milk. Our words are like spilled milk that we have to think about it before letting it out.

Lastly, when I prepare a surprise party for my loved one, I try to keep it confidential so that my children may give it away. When asked about the event, I give a partial truth about it as though I am not interested in it.

Truth is to be revealed in the end. Therefore, we contain our pent-up desire to talk about it. We need to be wiser to get the upper hand by controlling the extent to which the truth is disclosed. Those with exclusive information can win the deal.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Steve, thanks for working on your homework. Here are some changes for you to review. The sentences are simplified for better understanding, rewritten for clarity and simplicity, and adjusted for improved flow and clarity.
Sincerely,
^^ T. Ara

When we’re summoned as a witness to an accident, we are very careful about what we say, all the more when we’re investigated as a suspect. 
>>> When summoned as a witness to an accident or investigated as a suspect, we need to be cautious about what we say.
That’s because we don’t know what it develops after my testimony.
>>> It's because we don't know what might unfold after giving our testimony.
Aside from that, I believe that to watch our mouth is a lot wiser than a big mouth. 
>>> Additionally, I believe it's wiser to be careful with our words rather than having a big mouth, as the saying goes. 
As the old saying goes, there is no crying over the spilled milk. 
>>> The old saying "There is no use crying over spilled milk" suggests that we shouldn't dwell on past mistakes.
Our words are like spilled milk that we have to think about it before letting it out.
>>> Our words are like spilled milk; we should think before letting them out.
Lastly, when I prepare a surprise party for my loved one, I try to keep it confidential so that my children may give it away. 
>>> Lastly, when preparing a surprise party for a loved one, I keep it confidential to avoid my children giving it away.
When asked about the event, I give a partial truth about it as though I am not interested in it.
>>> If asked about the event, I provide partial information, acting as if I am not too interested in it.
Truth is to be revealed in the end. Therefore, we contain our pent-up desire to talk about it. 
>>> The truth will be revealed eventually, so it's essential to contain our desire to talk about it.
We need to be wiser to get the upper hand by controlling the extent to which the truth is disclosed. 
>>> Being wise involves controlling the extent to which the truth is disclosed to gain an advantage.
Those with exclusive information can win the deal
>>> Those with exclusive information have the upper hand in a deal.



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