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way to have positive mind

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There are some ways to have positive mind. First of all, meditation can remove negative thought. Forgetting is able to be the first step to be positive. It is useful to relax and start to think positively. Also, making a plan B can help to have positive mind. Because it makes me relieve. I don't need to worry about the worst situation.

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Good morning, Dami!

A positive mind is a place of limitless opportunities. Of course, this does not mean false expectations of no failure. Our lives are full of problems and a positive mind has always the will and drive any difficulty and acceptance to things we cannot solve.

Then, a positive mind is realistic and enthusiastic to proactively solve and enjoy life's struggles and successes. 

Thank you for a well-written composition. Below, I can see correct sentences and a few minute mistakes. Please read them carefully.

I will see you later in class.

-T. Donna~

There are some ways to have positive mind. 
>> There are some ways to have a positive mind. 

First of all, meditation can remove negative thought. 
>> First of all, meditation can remove negative thoughts

Forgetting is able to be the first step to be positive. 
>> Forgetting is the first step to be positive. 

It is useful to relax and start to think positively. 
>>  Correct!

Also, making a plan B can help to have positive mind. 
>> Correct!
Or: Also, making a plan B can help to have a positive mind. 

Because it makes me relieve.
>> Because it makes me relieved.
Or: It makes me relieved.

 I don't need to worry about the worst situation.
>> Correct!
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