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There is some way to be healthy and i will tell you some of it. First of all, to be healthy the basic thing is to wash my hands. In hands because there is lots of germs, i t can be the reason why we get many disease. Secondly we should eat food wisely. People say that don't it sugar and the reason why is just, however, we can eat sugar if we follow the limited amount. We also should eat fruit and vegetable too, to become healthily. Lastly we need to keep exercise. Not just doing stretch, we should play sports because we can be healthy and also we can feel fun, so it can help us making new hobby.

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Good day, Jude! I'm happy reading your composition. It is good that you know what is healthy and not for your body. We need take care of our body in order for us to be healthy. We will talk more about this in class. I will see you then. Always be safe and warm! ~T. Lyn
There is some way to be healthy and i will tell you some of it. 
>>There are ways to become healthy and I will tell you a few of them.
First of all, to be healthy the basic thing is to wash my hands. 
>>First of all, the basic rule to stay healthy is to wash your hands.
In hands because there is lots of germs, i t can be the reason why we get many disease.
>>There a lot of germs on our hands, which can be a reason why we get sick so much.
Secondly we should eat food wisely. 
>>Secondly, we must eat wisely.
People say that don't it sugar and the reason why is just, however, we can eat sugar if we follow the limited amount. 
>>People say we shouldn't eat sugar, but  you can only eat it in a certain amount.
We also should eat fruit and vegetable too, to become healthily.
>>We also need to eat fruits and vegetables to be healthy.
Lastly we need to keep exercise. 
>>Lastly, we need to keep exercising.
Not just doing stretch, we should play sports because we can be healthy and also we can feel fun, so it can help us making new hobby.
>>Exercising, not just stretching, can help you develop a new hobby because it improves your healthy and it is fun.
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