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People could change a part of their personality.
A lot of abilities are hided in people.
And they can find it by their effort.
Such as reading books, education systems doing exercises and relationship with others.
Experience and realizing are effected them making characteristics.

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Ms. Sunny!
Thank you as always for writing your homework. There will always be room for change. If one's personality affects a greater portion of his/her life, then I guess we need to find ways to change that. For example, an unsociable person, can be sociable if it is needed to improve her/his life.
Aki~

People could change a part of their personality.
>>> CORRECT!

A lot of abilities are hided in people.
>>>  A lot of abilities are hidden in people.

And they can find it by their effort.
>> And they can find it through their effort.

Such as reading books, education systems doing exercises and relationship with others.
>>> Such as reading books, education systems doing exercises, and relationships with others.

Experience and realizing are effected them making characteristics.
>>>  Experience and realization affect their change in characteristics.
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