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These days, many people are trying to learn a foreign language, and especially they focus on studying English. I think about that reason.
First, many company demand an english score that like TOEIC, TOEIC SPEAKING, Opic, etc.. Ofcourse, chinese and japanese are good, but there are certainly many companies, that require English.
Second, It is free to travel to other country. So a barrier of languege is lower than past. If you had been travel to other country, you might realize about importance of language. you can get help from translater, but It's not comportable than you speak yourself.

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Hi there Hye Seong~!^^ Thank you for doing your first homework. It was  nice to read your essay~! Keep writing and learning!
 Have a great weekend!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
These days, many people are trying to learn a foreign language, and especially they focus on studying English.
>>>CORRECT~!^^
 I think about that reason.
>>>CORRECT~!^^ 
OR>>> I think I know the reason why.
First, many company demand an english score that like TOEIC, TOEIC SPEAKING, Opic, etc.. 
>>> First, many companies demand an English score for TOEIC, TOEIC SPEAKING, Opic, etc..
Ofcourse, chinese and japanese are good, but there are certainly many companies, that require English.
>>> Of course studying Chinese and Japanese is good but there are many companies that require English.
Second, it is free to travel to other country. 
>>>CORRECT~!^^ 
So a barrier of languege is lower than past.
>>> So language barrier is lesser now than in the past.
If you had been travel to other country, you might realize about importance of language.
>>> If you had been to other countries, you might realize the importance of a language.
 you can get help from translater, but It's not comportable than you speak yourself.
>>>  You can get help from translators, but it's uncomfortable compared to speaking the language  yourself.
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