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Why do most people prefer traveling abroad?

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Because most people want to try new experiences that have never had. There is new thing where you go abroad. That would be worth it although it could cost a lot. And when you're younger now than later, you have to do it. As getting older, it's pretty hard to do it due to your strength. So, I'd love to recommend you should travel abroad even you're a homebody. You know , I used to stay at home as you. But, I thought it's an waste of time after military service. I hope you know about it as soon as possible. :)

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Good day, Eric!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


Because most people want to try new experiences that have never had. 
>> It's because most people want to try new experiences they have never had. 
There is new thing where you go abroad. 
>> There are new things when you go abroad. 
That would be worth it although it could cost a lot. 
>> CORRECT!
And when you're younger now than later, you have to do it. 
>> CORRECT!
As getting older, it's pretty hard to do it due to your strength. 
>> CORRECT!
So, I'd love to recommend you should travel abroad even you're a homebody. 
>> CORRECT!
You know , I used to stay at home as you. 
>> CORRECT!
But, I thought it's an waste of time after military service. 
>> CORRECT!
I hope you know about it as soon as possible. :)
>> CORRECT!

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