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I will express both praise and encouragement to keep going to someone who is making commitments in their life.
Additionally, I'm going to support them to make positive results by introducing people or examples related to similar experiences.
I believe that making commitments is reasonable to receive any compliments since an individual has chosen persistence rather than joy and satisfaction from other things.
Emphasizing lessons in the process despite the negative result is important for them to maintain optimal condition.

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Thank you for your homework, Yu Jin!

Your dedication will bring you to success!

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I will express both praise and encouragement to keep going to someone who is making commitments in their life.

>>I will express both praise and encouragement to individuals making commitments in their lives.
Additionally, I'm going to support them to make positive results by introducing people or examples related to similar experiences.

>>Correct.
I believe that making commitments is reasonable to receive any compliments since an individual has chosen persistence rather than joy and satisfaction from other things.

>>I believe that making commitments deserves recognition since an individual has chosen persistence rather than joy and satisfaction from other things.

Emphasizing lessons in the process despite the negative result is important for them to maintain optimal condition.

>>Emphasizing the lessons learned in the process, even in the face of negative results, is crucial for individuals to maintain an optimal condition and continue their journey of commitment.

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