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I want to recommend Jeju Island for a vacation. This whole Island is listed on the World Natural Heritage of UNESCO.It is a place where mountains,seas and green fields harmonize. First it has the highest mountain called Hanlasan. On the summit,there is a beautiful crater lake named Baengnokdam. Secondly we can enjoy many small and big oreums. Each oreum has its own shape and beauty. Thirdly the Island has many beaches that connect to the Pacific Ocean. We can enjoy white and black sand beaches in addition to common ones. Fourthly we can enjoy night open markets. There we can try many street food and buy nice souvenirs. Lastly we can yummy local food ~

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Hi, Gi Yean!
Thank you for recommending a nice place to visit in Korea. Jeju Island is actually quite popular among foreigners, even in my country, because whenever we watch Korean dramas, we often see it in scenes depicting vacations. It's nice to know that it is not only popular because of the beaches but also because of the mountains.
- T. Caitlyn
I want to recommend Jeju Island for a vacation. 
>> CORRECT
This whole Island is listed on the World Natural Heritage of UNESCO.
>> CORRECT
It is a place where mountains, seas and green fields harmonize. 
>> CORRECT
First, it has the highest mountain called Hanlasan. 
>> CORRECT
On the summit, there is a beautiful crater lake named Baengnokdam. 
>> CORRECT
Secondly we can enjoy many small and big oreums. 
>> CORRECT
Each oreum has its own shape and beauty. 
>> CORRECT
Thirdly, the Island has many beaches that connect to the Pacific Ocean. 
>> CORRECT
We can enjoy white and black sand beaches in addition to common ones. 
>> We can enjoy not only common beaches but also white and black sand beaches.
Fourthly we can enjoy night open markets. 
>> Fourthly, we can enjoy night markets.
There we can try many street food and buy nice souvenirs. 
>> There, we can try many street foods and buy nice souvenirs.
Lastly we can yummy local food 
>> Lastly, we can try yummy local food.
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