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If the youth prefer to Busan, it is a very glad news and signs for us.

In Korea, too many populations dense in the few metro cities serously, itself means the imbalance of country.

Urban imbalances are related to many parts which are industry, housing, employment and infrastructure of life etc.

This make the rich-get-richer and the poor-get-poorer cycle.

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Ms. Lily!
This is a piece of good news for your country that not all people complain about how difficult life is.
Let's talk about it later. see you!
Aki~

If the youth prefer to Busan, it is a very glad news and signs for us.
>>> If the youth prefer Busan, it is very good news and signs for us.

In Korea, too many populations dense in the few metro cities serously, itself means the imbalance of country.
>>> In Korea, too much population in the few metro cities seriously imbalanced the country.

Urban imbalances are related to many parts which are industry, housing, employment, infrastructure of life, etc.
>>> CORRECT!

This makes the rich-get-richer and the poor-get-poorer cycle.
>>> CORRECT!

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