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Untill my 40s,
I expected Christmas Day.
Many people wished to snow at Christmas.
and they prepared presents for their love or familly.
Especially Christmas was meaningful for young generation.
People who has partners are trying to confirm thier love .

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Good morning, Ms. Sunny!
For many people, Christmas is one of the best holidays where we can share our love with others. We forgive, become generous, and become very kind.
Probably we believe that Christmas is not about us, but about the person who was born on it.
Aki~

Untill my 40s, I expected Christmas Day.
>>> I had great expectations on Christmas day until my 40's.

Many people wished to snow at Christmas.
>>> many people wished to snow on Christmas Day.

and they prepared presents for their love or family.
>>> and they prepared presents for their loved ones or family.

Especially Christmas was meaningful for young generation.
>>> Christmas is especially meaningful for the young generation,

People who has partners are trying to confirm thier love .
>>> People who have partners are trying to show their love.
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