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Is it better to save your allowance or spend it?

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I think it's better to save money, because that's how you can save money on what you want to buy. But I don't think it's very good to just save and not spend.

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Hello, Ji Ho!
As always, I appreciate your composition. And I agree with what you've said. Although saving is a great idea, it isn't enjoyable. Perhaps people won't understand the importance of it until an emergency happens. As you get older and have more obligations, you would rather keep your money even if you would like to spend it. 
-Chammy
I think it's better to save money, because that's how you can save money on what you want to buy.
 But I don't think it's very good to just save and not spend.
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>> I think it's better to save because you can have money to buy the things you want.
But I don't think it's best to save rather than spend it. 
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