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I think that is good thing.

작성자: 윤*혜
2024-01-01 2984

회원님의 영작문

Artificial intelligence is a technology that is completed as mankind evolves, and I think that as human science develops, artificial intelligence will also have an ego.
However, it seems natural for mankind to be wary of artificial intelligence when it comes to the development of artificial intelligence.
Humans tend to hate humans when they have better creatures than themselves because they think they are the greatest creatures.
Therefore, on the positive side, artificial intelligence, a scientific collection of mankind, is something that can give wings to human development, but on the negative side, it is likely to be the biggest cause of human degeneration.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Da Hye, 

Your thoughts on artificial intelligence reflect a thoughtful consideration of both the positive and negative aspects. The idea that as human science progresses, artificial intelligence may develop a form of consciousness is intriguing. Your recognition of the natural wariness that humans might feel towards AI, especially when it challenges our sense of superiority, is astute. Balancing the potential for human development with the concern about possible negative consequences adds depth to your perspective. It's evident that you've contemplated the complexities surrounding artificial intelligence. Well done! 

~Teacher Cathy 

 

Artificial intelligence is a technology that is completed as mankind evolves, and I think that as human science develops, artificial intelligence will also have an ego. 

>>As humanity advances, artificial intelligence, a technology that evolves with it, may eventually acquire a form of self-awareness or ego as human scientific knowledge continues to grow. 

However, it seems natural for mankind to be wary of artificial intelligence when it comes to the development of artificial intelligence. 

>>However, it seems natural for mankind to be wary of artificial intelligence when it comes to the development of it. 

Humans tend to hate humans when they have better creatures than themselves because they think they are the greatest creatures. 

>>Humans may develop animosity towards each other when they encounter beings they perceive as superior, as they often believe themselves to be the greatest creatures. 

Therefore, on the positive side, artificial intelligence, a scientific collection of mankind, is something that can give wings to human development, but on the negative side, it is likely to be the biggest cause of human degeneration. 

>>CORRECT 

OR>>While artificial intelligence, representing a culmination of human knowledge, has the potential to propel human development positively, it also poses a significant risk as a major contributor to human decline on the negative side. 

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