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I like eating with my mom the most.
Mom and I relationship is like a friend.
We share tiny events every day.
I always talk about school and my friends with my mom.
We often watch TV when we eat.
Also, we talk about the TV program what we see.
Mom is an adult, so she knows more than me.
So she tells new facts and gives me many advices.
Therefore, I like eating with my mom based on this point.

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Hi Julie!
This is a good topic and you have stated some good points.
I appreciate the way you included examples from your life.
It really helped you in making specific and common statements.
Overall, you did a great job!^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
I like eating with my mom the most.
>> Correct
Mom and I relationship is like a friend.
>> My mom and I are just like friends in our relationship.
We share tiny events every day.
>> We share simple events every day.
I always talk about school and my friends with my mom.
>> Correct
We often watch TV when we eat.
>> Correct
Also, we talk about the TV program what we see.
>> Also, we talk about the TV programs that we want to see.
Mom is an adult, so she knows more than me.
>> Mom is an adult, so she knows more than I do.
So she tells new facts and gives me many advices.
>> So she tells me about new facts and gives me a lot of advice.
Therefore, I like eating with my mom based on this point.
>> Correct
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