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Should parents help their children plan their future?

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To prepare children¡¯s future, parents should help their children. It might be too much concerning but we should try to control the level of interrupting their lives. However children are still immature, so sometime they need to get suggestions or helps to progress children¡¯s plans. In my case, I used to ask my parents how to decide what is the important thing in my life and even sometime I still need their helps to avoid ruining somethings. It doesn¡¯t mean they control my life, they just give me some advice. So taking a advice is up to me. I always thank for their sacrifices.

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To prepare children¡¯s future, parents should help their children. 
>>> correct  
It might be too much concerning but we should try to control the level of interrupting their lives. 
>>> correct
>>> OR: It might be too concerning but we should try to limit how much we try to intervene in their lives.    
However children are still immature, so sometime they need to get suggestions or helps to progress children¡¯s plans. 
>>> However, children are still immature, so they sometimes need to get suggestions or help to make progress in their plans.    
In my case, I used to ask my parents how to decide what is the important thing in my life and even sometime I still need their help to avoid ruining some things.
>>>  correct 
It doesn¡¯t mean they control my life, they just give me some advice. 
>>> correct  
So taking a advice is up to me. 
>>So taking/following their advice is up to me.  
I always thank for their sacrifices.
>>>  I am always thankful for their sacrifices.
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