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We need break away trom social media.

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It causes more negative effects to us especially young gengration.

It is making us dopamine addict.

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Good day, Ms. Lily!
I would have to agree with you. Social media creates a gap between people that the other person has a higher status. 
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We need break away trom social media.
>>> We need to get away from social media.

SNS seems to be connected each other, But in reality our life disconnect owing to sns.
>>>SNS seems to connect people, but in reality, our life disconnects owing to SNS.

It causes more negative effects to us especially young gengration.
>>> It causes more negative effects on us, especially the young generation.

It is making us dopamine addict.
>>> It is making us addicted to dopamine.
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