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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the pros and cons of making your own clothes?

Some people make their own clothes for their individuality.
For example, we can customize our clothes or use DIY methods.
I think making out own clothes will be help we can try various fashion designs and develop out fashion sense.
Every year, a fashion show held at Dongdaemun in Seoul.
At that time, around the venue many models and clothe designers show off their clothes.
I think this it also good pros of the culture of designing clothes and show off their clothes to other people.
But, the downside of making clothes is that, some people copy a design from a other brands or their sell copied designs.
I feel this kind of behavior is disappointing.

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Hi, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the pros and cons of making your own clothes?


Some people make their own clothes for their individuality.
>> CORRECT!
For example, we can customize our clothes or use DIY methods.
>> CORRECT!
I think making out own clothes will be help we can try various fashion designs and develop out fashion sense.
>> I think making our own clothes will be helpful for trying various fashion designs and developing out fashion sense.
Every year, a fashion show held at Dongdaemun in Seoul.
>> Every year, a fashion show is held at Dongdaemun in Seoul.
At that time, around the venue many models and clothe designers show off their clothes.
>> At that time, around the venue many models and clothing designers show off their clothes.
I think this it also good pros of the culture of designing clothes and show off their clothes to other people.
>> I think this is a also good pros on the culture of designing clothes and show off their clothes to other people.
But, the downside of making clothes is that, some people copy a design from a other brands or their sell copied designs.
>> But, the downside of making clothes is that, some people copy a design from a other brands or they sell copied designs.
I feel this kind of behavior is disappointing.
>> CORRECT!

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