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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What¡¯s the best thing to do to keep your skin healthy?

I had good skin until when I was a student.
Everyone around me said to me my skin looks like a baby skin.
But, I became an adult, and my skin changed a normal skin.
In my opinion, the lifestyle patterns are important for skin healthy.
Among them, I think eating habits and cosmetics the most important.
Bad eating habits make our unhealthy body and bad skin.
I also had a bad eating habit for a long time, so my skin became worse than before.
And, the next important thing is the cosmetics you use for your skin care.
Many people use cosmetics to take care of their skin or makeup.
Sometimes this is help for our good skin, but if it doesn't suit me, it's poison to me.
Other than that, I think we have to go to the dermatologist often like celebrities.

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Hi, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What¡¯s the best thing to do to keep your skin healthy?


I had good skin until when I was a student.
>> I had a good skin until I was a student.
Everyone around me said to me my skin looks like a baby skin.
>> Everyone around me said to me my skin is similar to a baby's skin.
But, I became an adult, and my skin changed a normal skin.
>> But, as I become an adult, my skin changed into a normal skin.
In my opinion, the lifestyle patterns are important for our skin healthy.
>> In my opinion, the lifestyle patterns are important for our skin to be healthy.
Among them, I think eating habits and cosmetics the most important.
>> Among them, I think eating habits and cosmetics are the most important.
Bad eating habits make our unhealthy body and bad skin.
>> Bad eating habits make our bodies unhealthy and skin becomes bad.
I also had a bad eating habit for a long time, so my skin became worse than before.
>> CORRECT!
And, the next important thing is the cosmetics you use for your skin care.
>> CORRECT!
Many people use cosmetics to take care of their skin or makeup.
>> CORRECT!
Sometimes this is help for our good skin, but if it doesn't suit me, it's poison to me.
>> Sometimes this is helpful for our good skin, but if it doesn't suit me, it's poison to me.
Other than that, I think we have to go to the dermatologist often like celebrities.
>> CORRECT!

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