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Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What do you know about Japanese culture?


Korea and Japan are close countries, but there are many different customs and cultures.
Sometimes Japan has amazing cultures.
Japan is well known for manners and don't impose to other people.
But, I often get surprised when I go to a restaurant in Japan.
Because, people in the restaurant they can smoke inside the restaurant when they eat or drink.
We know well the cigarettes ash and smell are not good for hygiene, and their smoking stressful for others.
Another culture is about tattoos.
These days, many people has fashion or their own tattoos.
If we have small letters tattoos or small pictures on our body, we will can't go to public baths in Japan.
I heard that Japan is sensitive to tattoos because of Japanese gangster called Yakuzawa.
So, Japan is still one of the conservative countries about tattoos.

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Hi, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What do you know about Japanese culture?



Korea and Japan are close countries, but there are many different customs and cultures.
>> CORRECT!
Sometimes Japan has amazing cultures.
>> CORRECT!
Japan is well known for manners and don't impose to other people.
>> CORRECT!
But, I often get surprised when I go to a restaurant in Japan.
>> CORRECT!
Because, people in the restaurant they can smoke inside the restaurant when they eat or drink.
>> Because, people are allowed to smoke inside the restaurant when they eat or drink.
We know well the cigarettes ash and smell are not good for hygiene, and their smoking stressful for others.
>> We know well that cigarette ash and smell are not good for our hygiene, and their act of smoking is stressful for others.
Another culture is about tattoos.
>> CORRECT!
These days, many people has fashion or their own tattoos.
>> These days, many people are into fashion or have their own tattoos.
If we have small letters tattoos or small pictures on our body, we will can't go to public baths in Japan.
>> If we have small tattoos or small pictures on our body, we can't go to public baths in Japan.
I heard that Japan is sensitive to tattoos because of Japanese gangster called Yakuzawa.
>> I heard that Japan is sensitive to tattoos because of Japanese gangsters called Yakuzawa.
So, Japan is still one of the conservative countries about tattoos.
>> So, Japan is still one of the countries who is conservative about tattoos.

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