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Extreme sports such as skydiving and rock climbing are very dangerous and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

I think extreme sports are dumb. Also, sports make peoples exciting but don't make them dead.
We depend our life. if it isn't guaranteed, we don't need playing sports.
skydiving and rock climbing are very soft example. these are safe if lifeguard tool are there placement.
But sports that don't have these tool have to ban to play.
For example, Yamakashi is very dangerous sports ever.
I think that sports that aren't ready are not sports

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Hi Lee~! ^^ Good day to you!^^ If you make your internal life a priority, then everything else you need on the outside will be given to you and it will be extremely clear what the next step is. Keep on!
>> TEACHER GEMMA
I think extreme sports are dumb.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
 Also, sports make peoples exciting but don't make them dead.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
We depend our life. 
>>> We depend on our lives.
 it isn't guaranteed, we don't need playing sports.
>>> It isn't guaranteed that we don't need playing sports.
skydiving and rock climbing are very soft example. 
>>> Skydiving and rock climbing are some of the examples. 
these are safe if lifeguard tool are there placement.
>> These are safe if protective gear is provided. 
But sports that don't have these tool have to ban to play.
>>> But sports that don't have these tool have to be banned. 
For example, Yamakashi is a very dangerous sports ever.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
I think that sports that aren't ready are not sports...
>>> Sports which aren't prepared enough should not supported.
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