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Do you support death penalty? Why or why not?

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2024-02-06 3187

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I can't answer 'yes' to a question that supports the death penalty.
But If someone killed innocent people in cases where killing occurs without reason,
I think it should be death penalty.

But in case, someone killed the person who deserves to be killed,
It's very unfair incident to implement the death penalty unconditionally.
For example, husband has domestic violence steady, or he has been harassed to his wife,
It will be many opinion about wife deserves to be killed her husband.

But sometimes there are lots of case like this in korea, to execute a wife on the grounds that she killed her husband,
They don't often sentence murderers or serial killers to death, they only receive a few years of imprisonment at most and end up serving time in prison. When I look article like this case, I'm feel very unjustly treated and upset.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Thank you for this Eunice!

I can't answer 'yes' to a question that supports the death penalty.
>>> correct 
But If someone killed innocent people in cases where killing occurs without reason, I think it should be death penalty.
>>> But if someone killed innocent people in cases where killing occurs without a reason, I think it should be compensated with death penalty. 
But in case, someone killed the person who deserves to be killed, It's very unfair incident to implement the death penalty unconditionally.
>>>  But,  in the case where someone killed the person who deserves to be killed, it's a very unfair incident to implement the death penalty without considerations.
For example, husband has domestic violence steady, or he has been harassed to his wife, It will be many opinion about wife deserves to be killed her husband.
>>>  For example, a husband has committed domestic violence consistently, or he has been harassing his wife, there will be a lot of opinions on whether the husband deserves to be killed by the wife.  
But sometimes there are lots of case like this in korea, to execute a wife on the grounds that she killed her husband,
>>> But sometimes, there are lots of case like this in Korea where a wife is executed on the grounds that she killed her husband, 
They don't often sentence murderers or serial killers to death, they only receive a few years of imprisonment at most and end up serving time in prison. 
>>> correct 
When I look article like this case, I'm feel very unjustly treated and upset.
>>>  When I look at articles like this case, I feel very unjustly treated and upset.
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